richardf8: (Default)
[personal profile] richardf8

I would have preferred
If he came on eagle's wings
Than for this ransom

How does one of us
Redeem a thousand of them?
Here he is, with us.

The willow branches
The sweet scent of the etrog
Gilad Shalit free

יותר שמחתי
אם בא על כנפות נשר
מפדיון הזה

איך יפדה אחד
ממנו אלף מהם
כאן הוא אתנו

ערבי הנחל
ריח מתוק של אתרוג
שליט בן חורין

Date: 2011-10-18 09:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yamamanama.livejournal.com
Your poetry is bad and you should feel bad.

Date: 2011-10-19 01:29 am (UTC)
cellio: (avatar-face)
From: [personal profile] cellio
I don't seem to be able to respond in like form. I agree with you; I'm glad he's home, but I fear the price is too high and sets a bad precedent. This isn't a POW exchange; it's ransom for kidnapping. I fear what will happen next. :-(

Date: 2011-10-19 03:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] makovette.livejournal.com
Pleased to see you posting, hope you and yours are doing well.

And agreed, this is a horribly harsh situation..

Date: 2011-10-19 01:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deckardcanine.livejournal.com
First I thought you were criticizing the alleged sacrifice of Jesus. Once I Googled "Gilad," I recognized the news story. And yes, it's an awfully lopsided trade.

I'm pretty unforgiving of haikus that don't follow the 5-7-5 rule. If you can extend the second-to-last line by one syllable, so much the better.

Date: 2011-10-19 05:10 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deckardcanine.livejournal.com
Good work. I didn't dare suggest how to extend.

April 2017

S M T W T F S
      1
2345678
9101112 131415
16171819202122
23242526272829
30      

Most Popular Tags

Style Credit

Expand Cut Tags

No cut tags
Page generated Jul. 20th, 2017 08:47 pm
Powered by Dreamwidth Studios